2010-06-12 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene 23. Hopefully an improvement over the last couple scneesesrfsesf.
2010-05-28 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene 22. I think it's kind of INTRIGUING, which is sort of out-of-place
in this novel. But hey
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene 21. I really don't know what's going on here. This might be able
to stay, but I'll probably replace it during editing. REMEMBER THAT,
IRONS.
2010-05-08 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Minor formatting fix. Two entire scenes were italicized.
- Part Two - Them.txt:
20. Needs work, but this is probably also the best scene in some time.
2010-05-07 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: OH MAN NINETEEN. That's a little better.
- Part Two - Them.txt: Part of this scene (18( sucks
2010-04-16 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Scene 17. Not bad? Not good? Hello Earth Mother.
2010-04-09 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Scene Sixteen. HELP
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene fifteen. degrades in the last quarter. God help us when I type 16.
2010-03-25 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene 14. Not bad at all, and an unexpected turn of events.
2010-03-08 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene 13. Much better. Please only go up from here...
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene 12. Beginning is shot to hell and I don't know what I was thinking.
Any reader ought to be able to see that immediately. REVISE AS SOON AS
POSSIBLE.
2009-09-13 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene 11 checked in. It's pretty weird and it's not really supposed
to be. I ought to fix that some day. Note to future self: find out
what is wrong here.
2009-08-18 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
The tenth scene. Good? bad? Who the hell can tell?
2009-07-31 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Scene 9 is here to stay.
2009-07-08 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Eight terminates. is it good? I don't know.
- Part Two - Them.txt: 8 Cont.
2009-07-07 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Part of Scene Eight. The rest will follow soon;
I have already written it. The beginning, as usual, kind of
stinks. I have great hope for the end.
2009-06-09 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene Seven in its entirety. Needs work, but I like it.
2009-04-17 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene six (almost) in its entirety. I can't say it begins well...
in fact, I hate the beginning, and probably hate the middle, but
its ending is wonderful. The story once again changes direction.
Is it a sustainable course this time?
2009-02-15 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene Six. Starting slowly, as usual, but I'm actually intrigued by
the back-and-forth (almost of accusation). Miriam and Scim are not
at ease with each other. I'm not sure they should ever be.
2009-02-09 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Completion of scene five. It ended well enough, I suppose. Now the
hard stuff begins!
2009-02-03 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene five and its faulty dialogue are nearly drawn to a close.
The end of Five will be an invitation to external interaction
with the rest of the soldiers. Etc.
2009-02-01 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Even more Fun With Miriam and Scim.
- Part Two - Them.txt:
More of scene five, with a little piece added close to the beginning.
Miriam had no clothes under her armor, which she is obviously not
wearing in this scene. Neither she nor Scim treat this as
Biblical Nakedness: this is who they are.
2009-01-27 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Continuation of scene five. First description of Scim's appearance.
2009-01-24 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Not to mention I forgot to check spelling...
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Added the next written part of s5. I also had to wrap the first bit
properly.
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene Five begins now. It's rather heavy on the exposition, but
I can see no alternative for now.
2009-01-15 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene 4 is finished at last. It ended well enough. The challenge
continues...
2009-01-11 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
A weak link in the precarious chain of scene four. This will be
replaced some day.
2009-01-08 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
THE ADVENTURE CONTINUES. The battle (scene 4) is almost over, but they
still need to storm the ship and welcome their "angel." Where will it
go from there?!?!?
2009-01-06 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Added a few words to mark the end of the tension-build.
Inserted some reaction from Miriam to Scim's unprovoked "attack."
There should be a more intense, personal reaction, I think, as hinted
slightly earlier in the scene.
2009-01-03 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Scene Four is finally under way, and I love it! Remember to emphasize
the silence or whatever during the flare's arc, and to give a
glimpse of the men waiting behind Scim and Miriam. Then break the
tension with more violence.
2008-10-07 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Completed Scene 3 for my reading pleasure.
2008-09-26 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Continued II.3
2008-09-23 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Began scene 3.
- Part One - Him.txt: Redid line breaks.
2008-08-25 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Somehow I forgot to wrap the lines properly.
- Part Two - Them.txt: 600 new words.
2008-07-03 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Progress made on scene two; now things are fucking going somewhere!!
2008-06-28 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Finally, some new stuff!
2008-05-10 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt: Miro never cussed Choron out.
- Part One - Him.txt: Added a missing end quotation mark.
2008-05-08 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
I'm not so sure about this addition. It's a little slow and solid
for a bloody battle. Revision is key. Also changed a few things
based on feedback.
2008-05-07 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
A few minor adjustments thanks to LB; roughly 700 additional words
to end the scene.
2008-04-29 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Further additions (scene 1 continued).
2008-04-23 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt:
Fixed a type and other things after Lisa's suggestions.
2008-04-22 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part Two - Them.txt: Some trivial line break re-arrangement.
- Part Two - Them.txt: New file.
2008-04-14 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt:
Fixed several errors and clarified in one or two places.
2008-03-03 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt: Simple word corrections?
2008-02-28 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt:
Fixed a stupid mistake and used new 79-column fill algorithm.
2008-02-26 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt: Further small corrections.
2008-02-25 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt: Further typo correction, thanks to Watts.
- Part One - Him.txt: Fixed a really stupid mistake...
2008-02-23 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt:
The end result of the first run through Part One, including some revisions
suggested by J. Gaffney ("epstein"). Ready for a first public release.
2008-02-20 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt:
Corrected further spelling and diction problems. Added and removed several hundred words. Word count now surpasses 20,000!
2008-02-19 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt:
A few minor corrections and changes to improve readability.
- Part One - Him.txt:
Transplanted and revised a paragraph into an earlier part, where it truly belonged.
- Part One - Him.txt:
Added new introduction to section two; adjusted a few minor details after.
2008-02-18 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt:
Corrected some typos and did other general editing.
2008-02-13 jonirons <jonirons(at)boretower3>
- Part One - Him.txt: New file.